Beautiful imagery. Got lost a little when his friends disappeared -- went back to see if I'd missed something. But I love the perspective of someone teetering on the bridge between life and death, washed up on the shores of pain.
There's one little editorial suggestion I would make. You can tell me to sod off, but I think you might agree. But I'll only suggest it with your permission.
Beautiful imagery. Got lost a little when his friends disappeared -- went back to see if I'd missed something. But I love the perspective of someone teetering on the bridge between life and death, washed up on the shores of pain.
There's one little editorial suggestion I would make. You can tell me to sod off, but I think you might agree. But I'll only suggest it with your permission.