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I love the turn it took.

One observation: When Borga says " It makes my fucking skin crawl" I was kind of wishing for more of a Dvarri reference, or something related to that world that expresses the same sentiment.

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Thanks so much for the feedback! I'll give it some thought!

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I just wanna be immersed in the world. Don't wanna think outside of it. I realize there's an overlap because Tanner and Lauren entered that world from this one, but the Dvarri traditions are so rich you'd think they'd have a different term.

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I get what you mean. There's a scene way earlier in the book where a character says "twists the spleen" or something similar. So something like that might work here too.

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Anything unique to that world just keeps the reader there, which to me is the beauty of fantasy. Even if you're talking about real world issues, or real human desires, you're cloaking it in a world/culture unlike our own and selling the escape.

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