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It's great. There are a couple points along the way that the tension could be ratcheted up. Especially if you're going to paper publish this or query it.

Earlier the pace felt more like Tad Williams, now it feels more like Gemmell. Not a bad thing, just different.

Since I didn't have time to read this installment when it was released Saturday it has been on my mind. I'm invested.

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Thanks so much for the feedback! I'm not sure if I'm going to publish it outside substack but I might compile it into an ebook when it's all posted.

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Really digging the world you’ve built for the Dvari as well as the character development for Tanner, Lauren, Ddun and the whole cast. Keeping me wanting more!

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Awesome! Stay tuned!

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